The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

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The table shows data about different types of families living in beggary in Australia in 1999. The table compares

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terms of percentage different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

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country the proportion is not very high but the difference depends on factors like their

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, parents, number of people, age or number of parents.

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, if we focus on the highest percentages, we have 21% which concern sole parents, the following

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is single people with no

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with around 19%. After

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, there are couples with

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who have a proportion of 12%.

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, there are percentages under 10%, starting with a couple without any

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with 7%,

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single aged

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6% and

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with the lower proportion

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4%. All in all the percentage of all households is 11% represented by 1,837,000 persons.

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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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