The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty 

in Australia in 1999.
The table shows data about different types of families living in beggary in Australia in 1999. The table compares
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terms of percentage different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
It is clear that
in
this
country the proportion is not very high but the difference depends on factors like their
children
, parents, number of people, age or number of parents.
Firstly
, if we focus on the highest percentages, we have 21% which concern sole parents, the following
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is single people with no
children
with around 19%. After
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, there are couples with
children
who have a proportion of 12%.
Secondly
, there are percentages under 10%, starting with a couple without any
children
then
with 7%,
then
single aged
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persons
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with
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6% and
lastly
with the lower proportion
aged
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couple
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4%. All in all the percentage of all households is 11% represented by 1,837,000 persons.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • categories
  • families
  • poverty
  • single-parent
  • childcare
  • income
  • couples
  • dependents
  • older adults
  • pensions
  • unemployed
  • financial resources
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