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The line below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011.

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The line chart illustrates the
number
 of
students
decided
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 to participate in four different sports between 2001 and 2011 in the UK.
Overall
,
the
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most
students
 chose to play football throughout the period,
while
 basketball became less popular
at the end
 of the period. The
number
 of
students
chose
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who chose
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 to play running and swimming
similarly
 increased until 2006, when running continued to rise but swimming fell. In terms of football, it was the most popular sport, which accounted for 60
students
 in 2001, and it had some fluctuations.
Finally
, it reached just under 70
students
 in 2011. The
number
 of basketball players began at around 55
students
 in 2001, and it rose
up
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to just above 60
students
 in 2006. After that, it dramatically dropped to just above 20
students
 in 2008 and remained at the same level until 2011.
Additionally
, each
the
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number
 of swimmers and runners accounted for around 20
students
. They relatively increased to 50
students
 in 2006. The trend of running still climbed to reach
at
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60
students
 in 2011.
By contrast
, the
number
 of swimmers declined after 2006.
Finally
, it dropped to around 25
students
 in 2011.
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