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The pie chart below give information about the satisfaction levels of customers of a cafe in January and then in August in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below give information about the satisfaction levels of customers of a cafe in January and then in August in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the satisfaction
levels
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 of customers of a cafe in January and
then
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 in August in the same year. The data has provided three different aspects
in
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of
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 cleanliness, food choice &
quality
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and quality
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, and staff service and
also
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 with three
levels
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 which are very satisfied, satisfied, and not satisfied.
Overall
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, both cleanliness and staff service became very
satisfied
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satisfactory
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 during eight months
subsequently
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 with the most
half
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apply
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respondents choosing. In terms of food choice and quality, there is an increase in level of satisfaction from 48% not satisfied
change
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changed
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into
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to
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 47% satisfied.
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, customers feel satisfied with an increase of 10% from January to August
,
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 and decrease more 10% in feel not satisfied with the cleanliness aspects. On one hand, customers
chose
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choose
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 food choice and quality to significantly increase to
express
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their
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of their
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 feeling of being very satisfied from 23% to 36%.
On the other hand
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,
customer’s
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customer
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 satisfaction
levels
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 on staff services feel satisfied experiencing changes from 25% to 29%, and not satisfied
levels
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 reduce from 5% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the eighth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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