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The table shows the proportion of women in the labour force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of women in the labour force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows the percentage of
women
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 in the
labour
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force
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 and
women
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 in
management
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 in five countries, which are Australia, Egypt, Sri Lanka, Japan, and the United States.
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, it can be seen that the United States has the highest percentage of
women
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 in the
labour
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force
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as well as
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 the highest percentage of
women
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 in
management
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.   In the United States, both figures for
labour
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force
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 and
management
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 are just below half, which is the highest among the others. Similar to the former, Australia
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 has high numbers for both metrics, representing 42% and 43%, respectively. Sri Lanka,
on the other hand
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, has a fifth of the workforce, and the number of
women
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 who are dedicated to
management
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 is 12%.   The next two countries have contrasting relations in these two variables. The first is Japan, which has a 48% workforce, but only 17% of
women
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 work in
management
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. The second is Sri Lanka, which has a 41%
labour
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force
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;
however
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, the proportion of
women
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 in
management
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 is much lower than that, accounting for only 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, labour, force, management with synonyms.
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