The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives us information about the foreign tourists in three different areas in Europe, commencing 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, all of the areas experienced growth in those periods of time, despite the mountains being the only ones that never hit their low points, compared to the others.
Besides
being the least favourite destination, the highlands remained steady in their growth. Every year there was a rise in the people who visited them. It started in 1987, when there were only around 20 thousand people who were interested, a slight jump
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approximately 10,000 before reaching its peak, which was almost 40 thousand visitors.
On the other hand
, both the coast and the reservoir were experiencing some fluctuation in its trend. In 1987, there were only approximately 10,000 overseas tourists who visited the lakes. A decade later, the rates climbed dramatically in the lakes area, reaching the number of about 40,000 people.
Subsequently
, it rose significantly and hit its high point of around three quarters, before losing about 25.000 of its visitors
at the end
of the period. In comparison, the beach area had a slight decrease in 1992, right before exceeded the lakes and
finally
reached its peak in 2007 with about 75,000 visitors.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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