The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the
language
proficiencies of students
in a university in 2000 and 2010.
In 2000, about 30% of students
exclusively utilized English
. Similarly
, a comparable number of students
spoke only French or another language
. Learning two additional languages or solely mastering German were less popular choices among university students
. By 2010, students
proficient exclusively in Spanish became the predominant group on campus. Proficiency
in another language
ranked second in prevalence, while
competence solely in French or German exhibited the lowest percentages.
At the beginning of the 21st century, 30% of college attendees were bilingual in Spanish and English
. The combined percentage of those proficient in another language
and solely in French accounted for 30%, marking it as the highest among the groups. Conversely
, 20% of pupils lacked proficiency
in any language
other than English
.
A decade later, 35% of students
had acquired proficiency
in Spanish, marking it as the most prevalent language
skill. Conversing in another language
emerged as the second most prevalent trend on campus, with proficiency
in discussions held in French, German, and English
occupying 30% each."
This
revised version aims to maintain clarity while
avoiding the repetition of words more than twice in close proximity, especially in conveying information about language
proficiency
among university students
in 2000 and 2010.Submitted by binyang212 on
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