The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the
language
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proficiencies of
students
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in a university in 2000 and 2010. In 2000, about 30% of
students
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exclusively utilized
English
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.
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, a comparable number of
students
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spoke only French or another
language
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. Learning two additional languages or solely mastering German were less popular choices among university
students
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. By 2010,
students
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proficient exclusively in Spanish became the predominant group on campus.
Proficiency
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in another
language
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ranked second in prevalence,
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competence solely in French or German exhibited the lowest percentages. At the beginning of the 21st century, 30% of college attendees were bilingual in Spanish and
English
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. The combined percentage of those proficient in another
language
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and solely in French accounted for 30%, marking it as the highest among the groups.
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, 20% of pupils lacked
proficiency
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in any
language
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other than
English
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. A decade later, 35% of
students
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had acquired
proficiency
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in Spanish, marking it as the most prevalent
language
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skill. Conversing in another
language
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emerged as the second most prevalent trend on campus, with
proficiency
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in discussions held in French, German, and
English
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occupying 30% each."
This
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revised version aims to maintain clarity
while
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avoiding the repetition of words more than twice in close proximity, especially in conveying information about
language
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proficiency
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among university
students
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in 2000 and 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words language, students, english, proficiency with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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