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The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India.

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India.
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The charts illustrate the proportion of
food
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 consumed in 2008 compared between the
world
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 and two regions in Asia.
Overall
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, it can be seen that processed
food
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 was the most eaten in among three zones, despite the other categories
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 a different priority. Processed
food
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 was the favourite both in the
world
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 and
China
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, with 41% and 34%, respectively. The percentage of people on earth who consume vegetables and fruits was 29%,
while
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 in
China
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 the number was greater at 32%.
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, the animal
food
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 in the
world
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 was bigger than
China
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 by about 13%.
Furthermore
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, nuts and seeds had a huge gap share, in which only 4% consumed it, whilst in
China
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 there were 19%. In comparison with India, 39% of people consume processed
food
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, less than the
world
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. The second priority belongs to animal meals with 27%, followed by vegetables and fruits which were eaten by 23%. The
last
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 one was nuts and seeds, which had the smallest
consumer
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consumers
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 at 11%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, world, china with synonyms.
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