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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the average weekly income spending by families in 1968 and 2018. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it can be distinguished that people used to spend most of their earnings on food in 1968 ,
while
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 in 2018 the greatest trend went to
families
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family
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 leisure activities.
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Moreover
, fuel and power were ranked bottom both in 1968 and 2018.
To begin
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 with, As it is obvious, in 1968 families allocated 40% of their income to food, which was the highest trend. Housing and clothing
that
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apply
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include
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including
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 10% of earnings were in
the
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apply
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second place. All the others experienced less than 10% and the lowest one was fuel and power,just over 5%.
According to
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this
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 chart, in 2018 the
most
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highest
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 proportion went to leisure activities, over 20%, which increased significantly from 1968. The other noticeable change was the drop in food percentage which declined in half
comparing
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compared
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 with 1968.
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, it can be seen that the proportion of household goods remained unchanged in these two years.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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