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The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportions of United Kingdom
student
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students
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 at a
univerity
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university
 in England who has
ability
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the ability
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 to speak other languages
in addition
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 to English, in 2000 and 2010.
overall
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,
Spanish
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 became the most popular
language
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 by far in both years. students, who were able to speak in
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also
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 increased its dominance, whilst other languages changed in
propostion
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proportion
proposition
. The three biggest languages which
student
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students
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 mastering on it in 2000 were
Spanish
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, No other
language
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, and another
language
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, with 30%, 20%, and 15%, respectively.
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, whilst
Spanish
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 increased its number of students to 35%, no other
language
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 saw a notable decrease to 10%. Despite a medium increase of 15% to 20% in 2010, another
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 replaced no other
language
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 as the second-highest of students number in 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words spanish, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • linguistic diversity
  • polyglot
  • language acquisition
  • second language (L2)
  • foreign language
  • fluency
  • working knowledge
  • mother tongue
  • language competence
  • language decline
  • cultural exchange
  • global language
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