The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
given bar
char
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chart
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illustrate
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illustrates
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the information about divergent
level
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levels
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of
post school
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post-school
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prerequisite
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prerequisites
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in Australia and the percentage of
men
and
women
who have had
this requirements
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. All in all, what
deduce
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from
this
bar chart is that
men
have held more
these
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of these
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qualifications than
women
in lower degrees and in higher degrees like
master
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master's
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and postgraduate.
In contrast
in
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at
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bachelor
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the bachelor
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and undergraduate
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levels
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level
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level,
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women
have educated more than
men
. With Respect to the skilled vocation diploma
men
's percentage is around 95%
that
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apply
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far more
that
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than
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women
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women's
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with just approximately
15%.
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15% On
on the other hand
, the proportion of
women
in
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with
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undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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virtually is dubbed in comparison with
men
at 75% and 35% respectively.in
bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree
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degree,
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women
's proportion is slightly more than
men
by 50 % and 45 % in turn. If we catch a glimpse at
this
chart, it can clearly be seen that figure for
men
in terms of postgraduate degree is more than
two fold
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in
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apply
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compared with
women
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women's
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percentage with 70% for
men
and just under 30% for
women
.
Finally
, in
master
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master's
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degrees
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degree
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degree,
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men
have conquered the
competences
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competencies
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with roughly 60%
whereas
women
have had 40% of
this
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these
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qualifications.
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