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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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char
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chart
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 the information about divergent
level
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levels
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 of
post school
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post-school
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prerequisite
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prerequisites
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 in Australia and the percentage of
men
 and
women
 who have had
this requirements
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this requirement
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. All in all, what
deduce
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 from
this
 bar chart is that
men
 have held more
these
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of these
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 qualifications than
women
 in lower degrees and in higher degrees like
master
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master's
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 and postgraduate.
In contrast
in
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at
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bachelor
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the bachelor
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 and undergraduate
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levels
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level
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level,
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women
 have educated more than
men
. With Respect to the skilled vocation diploma
men
's percentage is around 95%
that
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apply
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far more
that
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than
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women
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women's
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 with just approximately
15%.
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15% On
on the other hand
, the proportion of
women
in
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with
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 undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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 virtually is dubbed in comparison with
men
 at 75% and 35% respectively.in
bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree
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degree,
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women
's proportion is slightly more than
men
 by 50 % and 45 % in turn. If we catch a glimpse at
this
 chart, it can clearly be seen that figure for
men
 in terms of postgraduate degree is more than
two fold
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in
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compared with
women
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women's
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 percentage with 70% for
men
 and just under 30% for
women
.
Finally
, in
master
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master's
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degrees
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degree
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degree,
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men
 have conquered the
competences
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competencies
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 with roughly 60%
whereas
women
 have had 40% of
this
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these
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 qualifications.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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