You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear..., You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Emily, I hope you are doing great and coping well with the

school

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. I am writing you

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letter, filled with some tips and tricks to help you get adjusted

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your new

school

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Firstly

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, be confident and open, I understand it is hard to make friends but confidence is the key to

achieve

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it. Girls love

such

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nature and will reach you to be friends with you. You will get prominent in

teacher's

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the teacher's

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eye too which is another benefit.

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, join different

school

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clubs and choose wisely as it should be the place where your

intrest

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interest

lies.

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take

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part in different class activities

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school

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activities,

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apply

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will help you engage.

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, it is most important,

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to trust

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trust

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yourself as you

got

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have

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the

potiential

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potential

to score high and be a best friend to anybody. You have a friendly and humorous nature which should be visible to all, don't get afraid of failure it is

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a step forward. I hope

this

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can help you and if you need me, I am a call away. Sending you love and hugs! Best Regards, Emma Watson

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coherence cohesion

Your letter's structure needs attention. Try to arrange your ideas in clear, separate paragraphs, each containing a single main idea with supporting details.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is a bit informal and could be more appropriate for the context. Consider using a mix of formal and informal language to suit the situation.

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Some more specific examples or personal stories could strengthen your suggestions and make them more relatable.

coherence cohesion

Although you have a greeting, the letter lacks a personalized sign-off. It would be more appropriate to end the letter with your own name instead of a celebrity.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

187 words

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