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The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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given
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given diagram illustrates how the system of Australia
in
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is
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 supplying
water
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 now and in the future. At a glance, there are three categories of
water
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 which are pure
water
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,
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storm
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stormwater
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water
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 and
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waste
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wastewater
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water
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. The pure
water
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 is supplied to households, factories, shops and
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the city
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city
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cities
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while
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 the
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storm
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stormwater
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water
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 produced by them is thrown
to
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river
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the river
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.
To begin
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 with, the
water
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 supply system in Australia uses
dam
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dams
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/storage to save pure
water
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 and
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waste
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wastewater
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water
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.
Then
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, the pure
water
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 from
dam
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the dam
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/storage is distributed to some places
such
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 as households, factories, shops and
city
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the city
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.
While
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 the
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waste
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wastewater
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water
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 from
dam
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the dam
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/storage goes to
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water
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the water
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 treatment plant.
Furthermore
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, the households, the factories, the shops and the city
result
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result in
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 some
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storm
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stormwater
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water
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that is
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 directly sent to
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water
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the water
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 treatment
plant
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plants
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 and they
also
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 produce
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storm
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stormwater
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water
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that is
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 distributed to
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the river
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river
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rivers
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. In the future, Australia will use the same
water
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 supply management to distribute the pure
water
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,
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storm
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stormwater
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water
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 and
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waste
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wastewater
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water
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, storm, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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