The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
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given diagram illustrates how the system of Australia
in
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is
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supplying
water
now and in the future. At a glance, there are three categories of
water
which are pure
water
,
storm
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stormwater
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water
and
waste
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wastewater
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water
. The pure
water
is supplied to households, factories, shops and
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the city
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city
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cities
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while
the
storm
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stormwater
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water
produced by them is thrown
to
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into
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river
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the river
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.
To begin
with, the
water
supply system in Australia uses
dam
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dams
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/storage to save pure
water
and
waste
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wastewater
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water
.
Then
, the pure
water
from
dam
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the dam
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/storage is distributed to some places
such
as households, factories, shops and
city
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the city
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.
While
the
waste
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wastewater
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water
from
dam
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the dam
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/storage goes to
water
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the water
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treatment plant.
Furthermore
, the households, the factories, the shops and the city
result
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result in
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some
storm
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stormwater
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water
that is
directly sent to
water
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the water
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treatment
plant
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plants
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and they
also
produce
storm
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stormwater
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water
that is
distributed to
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the river
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river
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rivers
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. In the future, Australia will use the same
water
supply management to distribute the pure
water
,
storm
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stormwater
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water
and
waste
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wastewater
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water
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, storm, waste with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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