The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar graph compares the
percentage
of males and females proportion passing their driving test in one
Asian
nation between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that In
this
Asian
nation, the passing rate increased for drivers of both sexes
overall
. In
this
Asian
country, women have consistently passed test percentages greater than those of men. Looking at the details, In
this
Asian
nation, the
percentage
of women who passed their driving exams was close to 47% in 1980. Over the next ten years, it rose somewhat to just over 50%, and in 2000, it rose dramatically to around 68%. It
then
somewhat declined to roughly 64%.By the conclusion of the era,
but
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it was still greater than
this
percentage
for men.
In contrast
, In the first year, the
percentage
of men in an
Asian
country who passed their driving test was slightly less than 30%.
Moreover
, It increased sharply during the next 20 years, reaching about 49%, and
then
stabilized in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, asian with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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