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The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.

The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.
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The bar chart depicts statistical data about the
number
 of
people
payed
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paid
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, and volunteers involved in 4 different
sport
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sports
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 activities in Australia during
year
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the year
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 2015.
Overall
,
voluneers
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volunteers
 overweight the
number
 of paid
people
 in each field with an exception, referees. Looking more closer at
number
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a number
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 of volunteers, it can be noticed that coaching has the highest
numbe
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number
, around 73 in opposition
with
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to
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 referees with just 32
people
,
on
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in
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 the second place being
other
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the other
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section
 with just under 60. As
it
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apply
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can be observed around 45
volunteer
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volunteers
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enrolledd
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enrolled
 as therapists
while
 other
section
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sections
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 have
with
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apply
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around 15
people
more
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. On
he
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the
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 other hand, the
number
 of paid
people
are
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is
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 more
simmilar
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similar
. Referees and therapists
,
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apply
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 account
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for
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around 40 in each
section
. In
coaching
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coaching,
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 there are
aproximatelly
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approximately
 43
people
 and
other
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in other
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section
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sections
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 just under 50.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, section with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • volunteers
  • paid workers
  • roles
  • sports sector
  • Australian town
  • duties
  • motivations
  • significance
  • contribution
  • professionalism
  • specialization
  • sustainability
  • distribution
  • trends
  • volunteerism
  • community engagement
  • professional development
  • accessibility
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