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The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy production of france in two years.

The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy production of france in two years.
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The pie charts illustrate the
comparisom
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comparison
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energy
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of energy
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production
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 in 4 different
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source
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sources
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 (Gas, Coal, Nuclear,
petro
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petrol
 and other) of
france
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France
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 between 1995
nd
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and
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 2005.
Overall
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, a glance at the pie charts
show
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 that
,
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apply
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 Gas was the main
source
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 of
energy
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 in both 1995
an d
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and
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 2005 with minimal
differece
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difference
to
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from
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 coal.
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 ,
other
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another source
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source
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 of
energy
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were
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 the least
energy
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production
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 and became just under almost twice in the 15 next years. In terms of Gas that was the second major
source
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ofenergy
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of energy
, there was a slight decrease from 29 to 30.
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, nuclear with a share of 6% in 1995
it
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apply
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rose
minimaly
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minimally
minimal
 and reached
at
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apply
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10% in 2005. The amount of
energy
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 accounted for 29% proportion of petro,
was
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which was
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 a significant
diclined
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declined
decline
 to 19%(in 1995 and 2005 respectively). With
consider to
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consideration
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 Petro and Coal, their figures were around
same
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the same
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 in the
firts
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first
 year.
other
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another source
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source
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 of
enegry
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energy
production
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 saw a considerable growth from 4% to 9%.
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 the highest increase
of
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in
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energy
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production
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 belongs to
other
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another source
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source
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 of
energy
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production, source with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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