In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can / should be done about it? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a large population of the best graduates in some nations today without
jobs
. In my perspective,
this
is because of limited
jobs
and
skills
. The best way to solve
this
problem is to provide more
jobs
and soft
skills
that must be taught in university.   A limited
job
and skill set are the biggest reasons why it is difficult to have a
job
in some
countries
.
Countries
provide a lot of education without finding out the type of
job
they need in their
countries
.
Consequently
, they have a lot of highly educated graduates who do not match
jobs
in their
countries
. There is no equality between supply and demand in their
countries
.
For example
, in Papua, they need more teachers and doctors;
however
, they only have mostly economists rather than what they need. So that means an increase in unemployment in Papua.   The key to overcoming
this
problem, fundamentally, is that the government must provide more
jobs
so that their workers have access to them. Nations could open many types of
jobs
,
such
as economic, social, medical, law, and others
,
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so that people with different
skills
would have an opportunity for a
job
.
For example
,
firstly
, governments encourage their people so that creativity and innovation create new employment.
Secondly
, the government provides money to support community businesses.   Sequentially, soft
skills
must be taught in universities. Universities and governments work together to see the basic needs of
countries
;
therefore
, they can find the various
skills
needed to work in a country. Knowing the basic needs of nations, education departments could manage curriculum
according to
what types of
jobs
exist in a country.
For instance
,
in
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rural areas of Indonesia,
they
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need more teachers and medical personnel so that the government of Indonesia can regulate soft
skills
according to
existing conditions.   In conclusion, in my view, highly educated graduates find it difficult to have a
job
because of a lack of
job
opportunities and
skills
. In consequence, policymakers must provide more
jobs
, and universities must arrange
curriculum
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according to
the soft
skills
required.
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