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The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures given compare a
town
 before and after the building of a hydroelectric power dam in 1990 and 2010.There have been many alterations throughout the given period, which
has
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have
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 led to the disappearance of green areas, floras and faunas, and a historical building, and the emergence of a
lake
, marine
habitaion
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habitation
, and a hotel among others.
Overall
, the
comparsion
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comparison
 between these two years shows a major change from a
once green
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once-green
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 rural area to an industrial
town
.
priot
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prior
 to changes, a dense forest existed in the northwest of the
town
, and below that forest, towards the middle, there used to be an ancient structure and habitation for rare plants and animals, which all had been removed by 2010. To the east of the
river
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river,
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 the farmland has been demolished, and villages beside that have been moved next to the river Following the
develpments
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developments
development
, a hotel has been added to the
town
.
Furthermore
, a
lake
 with
the
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apply
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fish inhabitants can be seen to the north in
2010
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the 2010
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 map. Just under the
lake
 hydroelectric dam
had
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has
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 been constructed, and
at
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on
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 both sides of the
lake
the
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apply
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electricty
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electricity
 panels have been added.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, lake with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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