You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice

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Dear Ali, I hope you are doing well. I just heard that you are not comfortable with your old school. I know what you feel. Adapting to some
situasion
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situation
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for some people to do. I writing
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letter to help you adjust to your new school.
To begin
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have
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initiating
conversations with your classmates. These are
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simple ways you can get started and get
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to adapting to a new
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environment
.
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common
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with
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friends. That way you will find
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friends
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who are compatible with you.
In addition
, you can
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clubs that align with your
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. That way you will
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a
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new friends in a different class
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such
as basketball or badminton. In general, my advice is to not let negative thoughts lead you to negativity. You shouldn't be alone because the world is too big if you don't have friends. Give me some information about how is everything going. Best wishes,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea that relates to the overall purpose of the letter. Avoid mixing different suggestions in one paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate greetings and closings for a friendly letter. The closing sentence could be enhanced to warm up the tone a bit more.
coherence cohesion
Work on your logical structure by presenting your ideas systematically. The advice should follow a logical sequence and be easy to follow.
task achievement
Your task achievement could improve. Make sure to fully expand on each point you suggest. For example, elaborate on initiating conversations and how this can lead to making friends.
task achievement
The writing tone should be consistent and appropriate for the task. Consider using a more supportive and friendly approach throughout.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • empathy
  • approachable
  • initiate
  • common interests
  • align with
  • participation
  • volunteer
  • committees
  • build relationships
  • patient
  • discouraged
  • positive attitude
  • support
  • encouragement
  • adaptability
  • networking
  • socialize
  • interactive
  • extracurricular
  • inclusivity
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