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Band 5.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice

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The struggle
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 face in staying focused during lessons is a big topic of discussion.
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 opinions vary on the reasons and solutions, I strongly believe there are several causes and ways to address
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 issue. The education system isn't always a good fit for kids. Long breaks can make it tough to regain focus, and some subjects become dull because teachers stick to one teaching style.
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 leads
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 to mentally check out of class even if they're physically present.
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, there are ways to help. Reducing break times in schools can prevent
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 from losing their connection to lessons.
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, teachers can make learning more enjoyable by using engaging methods like games, which kids love. In summary,
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 there are numerous reasons why
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 struggle to concentrate, it's our responsibility to find solutions.
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 isn't just about
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; it affects everyone. So, let's focus on implementing solutions.

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Greeting and Closing
Make sure to include a proper greeting and closing in your letter to frame your communication effectively.
Single Idea Per Paragraph
Your paragraphs should contain a single idea for better clarity and readability.
Complete Response
Focus on fully responding to all parts of the task prompt in order to meet the requirements.
Suitable Writing Tone
It's important to maintain a suitable tone throughout your letter which should match the informal nature of a letter to a friend.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • empathy
  • approachable
  • initiate
  • common interests
  • align with
  • participation
  • volunteer
  • committees
  • build relationships
  • patient
  • discouraged
  • positive attitude
  • support
  • encouragement
  • adaptability
  • networking
  • socialize
  • interactive
  • extracurricular
  • inclusivity
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