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Comparison of Energy Production The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years.

Comparison of Energy Production The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years.
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The charts compare the five
sources
 of
energy
 production in a country that took place in 1995 and 2005. Looking from all perspectives, the four
sources
 of
energy
had
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experienced an increase,
while
 the remaining one experienced a dramatic fall. In 1995, the three major
sources
 for
production
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the production
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 of
energy
 came from coal, gas, and
petro
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petrol
.
Initially
 registered at 29,8%, coal has remained in the highest position for
energy
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an energy
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source
 in the subsequent 10 years, recorded at 30.93% in 2005.
Conversely
, petro which served as the least
from
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 the three major
source
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sources
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 of
energy
 in 1995 with
percentage
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 recorded at 29.27, experienced a marked decline to 19.55% in 2005. Upon closer examination of the figures, the proportion of
energy
sources
 had taken up by the three components, which left the nuclear and other
source
 a slight number with 6,4% and 4,9%, respectively. Over the next 10 years,
due to
 the reduction of produced
energy
 from petro, it had caused a substantial rise
of
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 percentage to nuclear and
other
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another source
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source
, registered at 10.10% and 9.10%, respectively.
However
,
although
the
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a
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 significant increase from the other
source
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sources
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 has
shown
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, it still served them as the lowest position in the contribution of
energy
 production in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, energy, source with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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