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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how families spent their salaries in a country between the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, there were eight different areas where families spent their income each week, every unit measured in
percentage
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percentages
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,
such
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 as food,housing, fuel and power, clothing and footwear, household
goods
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, personal
goods
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, transport and leisure. The highest outcome was on food, leisure and housing unlike less spent on fuel, power and personal
goods
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Firstly
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, every family spent their income mostly on food which was exactly 35 percent in 1968 but later it showed a huge reduction of nearly 15 percent in 2018. The highest expense occurred on leisure from almost 8 per
cent
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 to 22 per
cent
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. Fuel and power showed the smallest change about 6 per
cent
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 to 5 per
cent
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. In 2018 expense reduction on clothing was
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extremely
extremly
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extremely
 noticeable almost half compared to 1968
By contrast
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, the expense of transport increased from 8 per
cent
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 to 14 per
cent
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, housing was another increase which around doubled
however
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, all the changes in household
goods
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 remained the same from 1968 to 2018

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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