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Some people prefer to work in the same type of job throughout their lifetime while others like to change the type of jon they do. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 career is
become
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one of
things
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the things
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people
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 in the world seek
for
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. In many sectors,
people
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 tend to stick only with their current
job
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, which is usually their first
job
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.
On the other hand
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, some communities
prefer
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prefer to
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 jump from one company to the other.
This
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 essay will examine the reasons behind those
contradictary
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contradictory
 perspectives. First and foremost, many workers
likely
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are likely
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 to be comfortable if they are in their safety nets.
This
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 is because
todays
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today
indutries
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industries
 are so competitive and
for
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those who are
unemployment
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, they hardly find
their
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 suitable
job
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 which
make
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 their previous jobs become their only options
instead
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 of getting no
job
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 at all.
Moreover
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, many workers do not want to adjust themselves
with
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new
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the new
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 environment.
This
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 is because many of them
are
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already feel comfortable with their surrounding. It's common to see
worker
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workers
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 get stressed out because they feel that they don't belong there. That's why healthy
relationship
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relationships
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 among co-workers are things that matter in the work environment.
In contrast
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 with
people
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that
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who
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 stay with only one company throughout their lifetime, many
people
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in
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 the other hand likely to try new experiences
with
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 frequently changing their background.
This
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 is because some
people
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 think they already feel satisfied with what
the
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their
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 previous
job
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give
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to
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them and want to
continously
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continuously
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 by developing new
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 from other opportunities. Many communities are
also
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a
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dreamer, or those
are
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who are
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 still pursuing their dreams
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, especially
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 in
term
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 of career and take whatever it costs to achieve
it
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them
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.
To sum up
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, both of those perspectives have valid reasons behind it. Many
people
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 not only think about themselves in choosing
they
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their
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jon
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job
, but
also
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depend
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 on the the society that they will work with.
Nonetheless
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, it's crucial to know the urgency before
taking
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making
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 the decision.

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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
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supported main points
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complete response
It's important to address all parts of the task fully. Your essay should not only discuss both views but also include a clear opinion of your own.
clear comprehensive ideas
Strive to express your ideas and points clearly and comprehensively. Avoid generalisations and remain focused on the essay prompt, providing detailed insights.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate relevant and specific examples to support your viewpoints. Such examples serve to make your argument more persuasive and well-rounded.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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