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The diagram shows the various stages in production of clean energy from coal.

The diagram shows the various stages in production of clean energy from coal.
The scheme depicts the process of
production
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 electricity from coal. It can be clearly seen that the energy
that is
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 produced in
this
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 process is relatively clean and
safety
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 for
environment
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the environment
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due to
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 the
removing
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 of harmful products. First of all, coal is carried to the large
furnance
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furnace
 where oxygen is added as well. After the coal is burnt, a slag is removed through the bottom of
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the furnance
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furnance
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furnace
 and
a
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raw syngas is produced.
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,
the
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harmful products
such
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 as carbon dioxide, mercury and sulphur are removed from the raw syngas as well. Afterwards, purified syngas rotates the gas turbine, which powers the generator, producing electricity.
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, the turbine
also
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 produces
the
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hot exhaust gases which
is
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 piped to
heat
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the heat
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 recovery steam generator, which generates energy as well.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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