The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of people in Uk in 2004
This
chart illustrates the citizen's expenditure
on
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three categories among different
age
groups in
UK
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the UK
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in 2004.
Overall
, it is clear from the chart that the
perentage
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percentage
parentage
of
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entertainment
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the entertainment
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category among
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the
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age
groups of 61
year
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to 75
year
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years
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was the
least
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lowest
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trend during 2004.
According to
what was
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shown
in the chart, the rate of food and drink in 2004
was
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slightly
increasing
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from
age
under 30 to
age
76
year
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years
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and above from 6% to 23 %.
Moreover
, the percentage of
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spending
soending
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spending
in
restaurant
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restaurants
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and
hotel
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hotels
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in
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age
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ages
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61 to 75
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