The charts below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Write at least 150 words!

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The bar graph depicts the information about the earnings of international trades between 2015 and 2016, broken down into five different

items

. Meanwhile, the table illustrates the change

Change preposition

show examples

proportion in each product in the same year.

Overall

, the highest export product was petroleum,

while

the lowest was textiles.

Furthermore

, the value of

percentage

change indicates a positive trend over the period given. The petroleum

items

had the top earnings of about $61

billion

and $63

billion

in 2015 and 2016 respectively.

In contrast

, textiles just earned a far lowest point at $27

billion

in the former year and achieved $31

billion

in the latter period. These figures were slightly different from the agricultural products which had almost similar value at approximately $30

billion

Likewise

, the two other categories had medium earnings. In terms of a change

percentage

, it is noticeable that almost all of the

items

show good values except gems and jewellery

items

. Taking textiles

for example

this

category had a high

percentage

at 15.24% compared to the agricultural products which got a lower figure at 0.81%.

Conversely

, the accessories products gained a decrease of up to 5.18%, and the rest categories had a modest

percentage

between 3% to 8.5%.

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