The consumption of the world’s resources (oil, and water etc) is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are the causes and solutions?

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It is true that these days, Natural
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overuse is a serious and challenging problem. There are lots of reasons behind
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, with suitable measures to mitigate
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resource over-consumption phenomenon.
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with, the main factor blamed for
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issue is industrialization and modernization causing the high exploitation needs. Especially, people use produce-electricity fuels
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as fossil fuels, coal which cannot be reused.
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, there is a fact that rapid population growth leads to increased demand for essential household energy.
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China, the country has not only the
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population and industry in the world but
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the world's highest oil consumer.
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, the
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would
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be excessively exploited for business purposes.
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, the over-exploit forests which are valuable
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for the medical field are being utilized extremely for agriculture.
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will lead to the extinction of many wild species and
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cause natural disasters
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as floods and droughts. Measures should be taken in order to deal with
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severe problem. One possible solution is that the government should focus on investing
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using renewable
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consisting of hydroelectric, wind and solar energy.
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can reduce
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dependence
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fossil fuel
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and the hazardous emission of gasses or fumes.
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, in Vietnam, electric motorbikes and cars
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as Vinfast have
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been produced, contributing to a step forward in the use of renewable energy in Vietnam.
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, the Government
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should bring out
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forest-protect policies which put the levels of punishments for deforestation without permission from competent authorities. In conclusion, the depletion of natural
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is a human problem that needs to be resolved.
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, it can hardly be addressed by only the government's work. It takes a great deal of effort from both the authority and individuals.
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