The consumption of the world’s resources (oil, and water etc) is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are the causes and solutions?

It is true that these days, Natural
resources
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overuse is a serious and challenging problem. There are lots of reasons behind
this
, with suitable measures to mitigate
this
resource over-consumption phenomenon.
To begin
with, the main factor blamed for
this
issue is industrialization and modernization causing the high exploitation needs. Especially, people use produce-electricity fuels
such
as fossil fuels, coal which cannot be reused.
Moreover
, there is a fact that rapid population growth leads to increased demand for essential household energy.
For example
,
in
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China, the country has not only the
second highest
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population and industry in the world but
also
the world's highest oil consumer.
As a result
, the
resources
would
also
be excessively exploited for business purposes.
In addition
, the over-exploit forests which are valuable
resources
for the medical field are being utilized extremely for agriculture.
This
will lead to the extinction of many wild species and
also
cause natural disasters
such
as floods and droughts. Measures should be taken in order to deal with
this
severe problem. One possible solution is that the government should focus on investing
and
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using renewable
resources
consisting of hydroelectric, wind and solar energy.
As people
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can reduce
the
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dependence
of
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fossil fuel
harness
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and the hazardous emission of gasses or fumes.
For instance
, in Vietnam, electric motorbikes and cars
such
as Vinfast have
also
been produced, contributing to a step forward in the use of renewable energy in Vietnam.
Furthermore
, the Government
also
should bring out
the
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forest-protect policies which put the levels of punishments for deforestation without permission from competent authorities. In conclusion, the depletion of natural
resources
is a human problem that needs to be resolved.
However
, it can hardly be addressed by only the government's work. It takes a great deal of effort from both the authority and individuals.
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