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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are six pie charts illustrating the percentage of
water
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 used in 6 areas of the world namely North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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. The
usage
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 of the
water
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 is focussed on three purposes, industrial
use
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, agricultural
use
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 and domestic
use
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.
Overall
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, the purpose of using
water
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 was seen maximum in agricultural areas in most parts of the world. On the whole, Central
Asia
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 had the maximum
usage
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 of
water
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 in the agricultural sector amongst all the areas which accounted for 88%. In terms of domestic
use
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, the
water
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usage
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 witnessed was lesser in Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 both recorded at 7%. The domestic
water
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usage
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 in South
America
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 was one-fifth of the
water
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usage
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 in all sectors
whereas
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 North
America
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 and South
America
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 witnessed 13% and 19% respectively. Regarding the consumption of
water
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 in industries, the data varies where North
America
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 witnessed half of the total
water
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usage
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, and the consumption in Central
Asia
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 stands only at 5%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia, usage, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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