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you have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: Give details of your stay What were the high & low points of the hotel What are your suggestions; recommendations and / or complaints about the hotel

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to give you feedback on my stay in your hotel. I stayed in your hotel for 2 days.The room number where I
spend
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 my nights was 40.It was booked under the name of Sukh where all utilities including morning meals were included. The things that I liked were free parking and clean
as well as
 a quiet environment maintained by the staff.I loved the rules that no noise after 10 P.M. unlike other hotels,but the meal which we got in the morning was not fresh,that was a disappointing point of my stay.
Apart from
this
, the wifi internet speed was so low that when I was watching
Youtube
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YouTube
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,it was buffering all the time. I suggest you work on
menu
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the menu
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of
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for
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the
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apply
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breakfast.As you are charging for
this
 meal,you should not compromise on the quality of its taste.
Moreover
,you should install wifi speed boosters on every floor of the building as it is a basic need of today's world and everyone has their mobile phones;
thus
,it will impact your customers in the long term. Yours faithfully, Raman
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter has a logical structure by grouping related information together coherently, maintaining a clear progression of ideas throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
The use of greetings and closings should reflect conventional letter-writing practices, including the use of polite salutations and appropriate sign-offs.
coherence cohesion
Aim to express a single idea in each paragraph and expand on it with supporting details for clarity.
task achievement
Task response could be improved by providing more detail about the stay and explicitly stating the duration of the stay.
task achievement
The writing tone should remain consistent and suitable for the context of the letter. Formality should be maintained throughout.
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