The line chart below shows the employment rate in four different industries in Australia from 1985 to 2015, in five-year intervals. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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