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The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 1985 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 1985 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Line Chart depicts the
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criminals'
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criminals
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criminal's
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propotion
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proportion
promotion
 in
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the USA
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USA
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the USA
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, UK, Australia
dan
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and
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 South Africa for 35 years (1985-2020).
In
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 a glance, the number of
crime
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crimes
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 in
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USA
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the USA
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, Australia and
UK
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the UK
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 decreased,
while
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 South Africa showed an upward trend over the period stated.
Initially
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, in 1985, beginning at 200 was recognised in
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USA
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the USA
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, and it dramatically rose
about
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 400
at
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 1995, after which it suddenly dropped to above 100 in 2020.
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, in
UK
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the UK
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, criminal rates started at 100 (1985) and reached a peak in 1995 (at 400),
then
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 experienced
decline
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a decline
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the
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 next 25 years. Following that, there
is
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 no significant changes
at
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 the crime rates in Australia, it can be seen that the total is under 100 for the whole 35 years.
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, the South
Africa
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criminals
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criminal
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 rate right over the early period started at above 200
,
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 and rose to 400 in 1995, it was slightly above the
USA
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 and it climbed significantly to 600
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 (2020).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa with synonyms.
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