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The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the number of
the
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apply
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foreign scholars who applied to
asubject
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a subject
subject
, Computer Science, class in a third year at
Canadian
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a Canadian
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 University.
Overall
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, the data
represents
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shows
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 that there was a
considerably different
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 regarding the number of Canadians, men and women who took two types of courses
derivated
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derived
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 from Computer Science. The majority of females and males studied Networking
topic
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,
while
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 the Database course was attended
a
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minority of them in the third period. In the case of male learning,

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment
  • overseas students
  • third year
  • Computer Science course
  • Canadian college
  • trends
  • plateau
  • significant changes
  • economic factors
  • educational reputation
  • dynamics
  • implications
  • resource planning
  • classroom diversity
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