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Frequency of Eating at Fast Food Restaurants in the USA (2003-2013). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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 fast-food consumption frequency data over the USA within a decade. In a glimpse, based on the three years given, it can be clearly seen the highest regularity was on
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fast food.
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 31% as the most definite and ended up with only 5% as hardly ever. Similar to the above paragraph,
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only 1% higher (never) was conspicuously stated compared to the initial class.
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introduction conclusion presence
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Both are crucial for giving the reader context and summarizing the main points discussed.
logical structure
There is a need for improved logical flow of information. Transitions between points are abrupt and the structure of the essay should follow a more logical sequence.
supported main points
Main ideas are somewhat supported, but there could be more detailed explanations and direct reference to data from the chart for increased clarity.
complete response
The response adequately addresses the task but could be more complete with a clearer overview and comparison of the years in detail.
clear comprehensive ideas
The ideas presented need to be expressed more clearly and comprehensively with better use of grammatical structures and vocabulary.
relevant specific examples
Relevant examples are provided from the data, but the use of specific percentage figures could be more systematically employed to strengthen the argument.

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