The pie charts provide information about percentage of purchase in British schools in 1981 , 1991 and 2001.
The pie charts show information regarding the proportions of procurement in
Brittish
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British
school
from 1981 to 1991. Fix the agreement mistake
schools
Overall
, it is noticeable that most aspect
need that decline significantly Change to a plural noun
aspects
is
furniture and equipment.
In 1981, the most Correct subject-verb agreement
are
school
requirement that spend the
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apply
school
fund is
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apply
Teacher'
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Teachers'
salaries
at 40%. Then
ten years later, the number of teacher
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teachers
salaries
increased gradually becomes 50%. Other top numbers was
other workers' Change the verb form
were
salaries
. However
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However,
this
job Correct determiner usage
these
salaries
fell suddenly into
22%. After that, resources for education like books rose smoothly for ten years. Change preposition
to
In contrast
, the less
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lowest
of
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in
school
shoping
is insurance which only transitioned from 2% to 3%.Correct your spelling
shopping
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