The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney.

The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the first line graph provided illustrates how many people travelled by train in Sydney over a decade from 1995 to 2004,
while
the second line graph reveals some data about the
trains
ran on
time
in the corresponding
time
.
Overall
, Unlike the number of
passangers
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passengers
that followed an upward trend until a level off in 2001, the percentage of
trains
running on
time
indicates a downward trend after some fluctuations throughout the given
the
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period. In 1995,
number
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a number
the number
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of train passengers used to be
an
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at an
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all-
time
low of 250
million
individuals. Following some gradual increases it reached
to
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just over 265
million
passengers in 1999, prior to reaching a peak of 300
million
passengers in 2001. The amount of train users
leveled
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levelled
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off
then
and reached a plateau with about 280
million
users.
Percentage
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The percentage
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of
trains
running on
time
was approximately 92% in 1995,
likewise
, that of in 1998 and 2003 with the same amount. After a number of fluctuations between 1995 and 2003, the percentage of
trains
running on
time
plunged to just over 70% in the year 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trains, time, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passenger volume
  • trend
  • peak times
  • off-peak times
  • punctuality
  • infrastructure
  • correlation
  • traffic
  • delays
  • satisfaction
  • efficiency
  • transportation system
  • reliability
  • urban mobility
  • capacity
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