The chart shows the percentage of males and females teachers in six types of educational settings in The UK in 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of males and females teachers in six types of educational settings in The UK in 2010.
the bar chart
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us information about the
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female
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male educators in six
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types
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of educational settings in
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England in during
2010
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year .
overall
it can be seen that the
percentage
of
women
teachers
in
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school
and primary
school
at the highest level in 2010
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men
academics in pre-
school
at the lowest
percentage
.
however
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men
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educators
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university
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more than
women
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instructors
,in pre
shcool
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school
and nursery
school
and primary
school
as well the pre cent of
women
teachers
at the top which was slightly below %100 .
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persentage
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percentage
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female
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females
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in secondary
school
was below %60 . femal educators were enrolled in college and private
school
by just %40
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.
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women
teacher
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teachers
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of
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University at the lowest
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to
other educational setting
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. refers to
men
teachers
,
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male educators
they
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were not interested
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pre-
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preschool
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school
and primary
school
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to the
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lowest than any other
places
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place
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,
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number of
men
at the
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secondary
,
college
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also
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college that
they
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have enrolled
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around %45
perentage
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percentage
.futhermore in university man
instractos
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instructors
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two
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more than
women
teachers
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, women, teachers, school, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • educational settings
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • further education
  • higher education
  • adult education
  • specialist education
  • dominance
  • balanced ratio
  • non-traditional roles
  • trends
  • percentage
  • male teachers
  • female teachers
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • statistical data
  • demographics
  • workforce composition
  • gender disparities
  • graph interpretation
  • educational workforce
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