the maps below show an industrial area in the town or Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the maps below show an industrial area in the town or Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
It is shown a map of Norbiton town, specifically the industrial area and its potential development. There are elements of the main
road
, farmland, town, river, and
factory
drawn on the map. Currently, the main
road
is on the south part and has a vertical
road
to the north, connected to a roundabout and only one other
road
of the roundabout towards the east.
This
industrial area has three
factories
located around the west
side
of the roundabout and two
factories
on each
side
of the east
road
with one
factory
at the end
, resulting
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total of eight
factories
. The farmland is on the upper
side
after the east-west river. The future plan for Norbiton includes a reshaping of
main
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road
,
factory
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a factory
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replacement and an addition of facilities,
such
as shops,
medical
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centre,
playground
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a playground
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, and
school
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a school
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.
First,
the reconstruction of the main
road
involves creating a smaller roundabout on the main
road
and
an
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addition
as well as
extension
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of the roads that are connected to the big
roundabaout
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roundabout
in the
center
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.
Second,
the previous east
side
road
will no longer be connected to a single
factory
,
rather
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a school. A playground is
also
built on the north
side
of the east
road
. Between the two roundabouts, there are shops on the left
while
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a medical centre
on
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the right. All of the
factories
are replaced with housings,
along with
its relocation. There are
also
two roads added connected in the
center
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and a connection to the farmland.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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