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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented diagram delineates the day and night production of electricity a four stages. First of all , we can analyse that clearly at
firs
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first
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 glance the production of hydroelectric is
cycial
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cynical
cyclical
 and consists of four main parts namely
High-llevel
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High-level
reservoir
, flow of
water
 power station and low-level
reservoir
. The
process
 begins when the
water
 flows from the river into
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir
 and
end
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ends
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 with
transmission
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the transmission
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 of electricity to the national grid.
On the other hand
,
while
 looking
the
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 day stage of the
process
 we encounter channelling the river
water
 into a high-level
reservoir
 backed up by a dam.
Besides
, intake is open. The generated electricity is
then
 sent to a national grid through power lines
while
 the excess
water
 runs to a low-level
reservoir
. The night stage of
process
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the process
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begin
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 their
process
 in
low-level
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the low-level
a low-level
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reservoir
. The
water
 stored in the low-level
reservoir
 is reverted to the power station and the turbines of the generator pump ,
thus
, it back into the high-level
reservoir
 which is closed during the night .
Consequently
, The river
water
 is stored at the
high level
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high-level
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reserviour
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reservoir
.
Overall
, The cycling of
electricty
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electricity
maintain
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maintains
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their
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its
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 journey
with
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at
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this
 stage.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reservoir, water, process with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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