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The pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of france in two years

The pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of france in two years
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The charts illustrate the proportion of five types of
energy
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production
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 in France from 1995 to 2005.
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, Gas and Coal had the most significant sources of
energy
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, around half over the percentage in both years.
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,
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 and others generated the least amount in
energy
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production
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, in all types of
energy
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 there was only minimal change over the
10 year
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 period.
Energy
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 produced by Coal comprised 29,80% in 1995 and a slight increase
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 30,93% in 2005.
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, in 1995 Gas the second place
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energy
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production
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 generated 29,63%
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1995 which rose marginally to 30,31% in 2005. For the remaining
energy
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production
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, there was an increased trend of approximately 5% for nuclear and others to 10,10% and 9,10%, respectively.
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, Petro which is the only
energy
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production
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 has decreased from 29,27% in 1995 to 19.55% in 2005.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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