The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#show #sales #sectors #zealand #summarise #information #features #comparisons

The charts illustrate the proportion of demand in five different market sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Overall

, shopping in

travel

Correct article usage

the travel

show examples

sector lost its market dominance and

replaced

Add a missing verb

was replaced

show examples

by films/music, whilst sales

from

Change preposition

show examples

cloths

Correct your spelling

clothes

show examples

also

decreased and online shopping for books increased. Online shopping for travel dominated

Change preposition

apply

show examples

the market in 2003, which decreased to 29% in 2013.

However

, that sector lost its dominance after ten years which replaced by

film

Correct article usage

the film

show examples

/music industry,

rose

Correct pronoun usage

which rose

show examples

their sales dramatically to 33% in 2013 which was

Change preposition

apply

show examples

21% in 2003.

Furthermore

, demand for clothes in 2003 was 24% in total, which saw a notable decrease to 16% in 2013. It can be seen a slight growth in

book

Add an article

the book

show examples

sector, which was 19% in 2003, that reached

Change preposition

apply

show examples

22% after ten years, which increased by just 3% .People shopped more in travel and films/music, both consist of more than half of total sales at 55% in 2003 and increased

Correct pronoun usage

apply

show examples

to 62% in 2013.

Submitted by Praslah on Sun Jan 14 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

▼

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

159 words

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5
band
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Science is making greater impacts in today's world. Therefore, there has been counteractions, which proposed that the major aim should be to improve individuals lives. This essay will discuss reasons why I approve of this statement.
5.5
band
More and more people are choosing to eat healthy food and making time to exercise regularly. Why is this happening and what can we do to encourage this?
In modern society, more and more individuals tend to consume healthy products and prioritize exercise frequently. There are two major motivations for this trend which are the awareness of healthy lifestyle and availability of healthy foods. To remain this, authorities should encourage and educate their residents about the importance of healthy habits to their life.
6.5
band
As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction for all workers? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
There has been a discussion that a significant portion of individuals' adult lives is dedicated to their professional activities, and job satisfaction has a massive impact on the mental health of individuals. Numerous factors, like motivation for advancement and healthy office relationships, contribute to a safe working environment. It is essential to understand the factors that impact employees' career satisfaction and the realistic expectations of job satisfaction for workers.
6.5
band
Some people believe tertiary education should be free, but others say universities should charge students. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
A group of individuals present the view that students should not pay university tuition fees, whereas others believe tuition fee must be taken from students. I strongly agree with the former opinion.
5.5
band
Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
With more developed countries emphasizing on building up their economies, there are different voices raising from citizens that progress in other aspect are playing an important role for a country too. In my opinion, I believe having a good economy is always the first priority in a country's development.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

More and more people are choosing to eat healthy food and making time to exercise regularly. Why is this happening and what can we do to encourage this?

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction for all workers? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

Some people believe tertiary education should be free, but others say universities should charge students. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.