The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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This
graph elaborates the
percentage of total drivers who got their driving license Change preposition
on the
during
1980 and 2010 divided by Change preposition
between
the
gender. The data for women throughout the Correct article usage
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years
shows a
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fluctuative
numbers Correct your spelling
fluctuating
while
men
's had a stable increase.
The thing that stands out the most is how both women and men
in 1980 became the least of Correct article usage
the population
population
that passed the driving test where the data couldn't Correct article usage
the population
suprass
50% of the individuals. More than that, it is Correct your spelling
surpass
suppress
also
obvious to see that females more
likely can drive than Add a missing verb
are more
men
. This
is because the topmost number lead
the Wrong verb form
led
overall
graphic in the year of
2000 where it was nearly 70% of women could operate Change preposition
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the
cars. Correct article usage
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Though
, there was a slight decline in 2010 that Correct word choice
However
was
almost made the numbers hit 60%.
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On the other hand
, men
started with the lowest number in the overall
chart with only almost 30% of population
. Add an article
the population
However
, not like how females'
chart showed a decrease, Correct article usage
the females'
men
's showed an upward trend for each years
until Change to a singular noun
year
finally
being tied in the two years
. The peak years
were in 2000 and 2010 where
two of them placed the highest number with nearly 50% of males certified car Correct word choice
when
driver
.Fix the agreement mistake
drivers
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