This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
The line chart displays the percentage of four different materials that were recycled between 1982 and 2010 in a specific country.
Overall
, paper
and
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carboard
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cardboard
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and glass containers have a greater recycling
rate
than
aluminium
cans
and plastics.
However
, they do slightly fluctuate. The proportion of
aluminium
cans
that were recycled increased pretty consistently from around 1885 until around 2009. The recycling
rate
of plastic
also
increased yet not significantly. The recycling
rate
of paper
and
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cardboard and glass containers faced fluctuations from about 1982 to approximately 2010. The amount of recycled paper and cardboard began
with
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a little above 60% in around 1982.
This
fluctuated from around 1982 until around 1994.
However
, it decreased consistently from 80% in approximately 1994 to 70% in around 2010. Fluctuations can
also
be seen in the recycling
rate
for glass containers. There
is
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a 50% recycling
rate
in around 1982, and
this
decreased to 40% in around 1990.
However
, the recycling
rate
increased from 40% in around 1990 to around 60% in about 2010.
On the other hand
, the recycling
rate
for
aluminium
cans
and plastics increased throughout the years. The percentage of
aluminium
cans
that were recycled in around 1986 is below 10%. The percentage increased consistently, reaching a little over 20% in around 2002.
Then
,
this
increased at a greater
rate
from around 2002 to approximately reaching 45% in around 2010. The proportion of plastics that were recycled increased slightly throughout the years. It began with a recycling
rate
of below 10% in around 1990 and almost reached 10% in around 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, aluminium, cans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 16 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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