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you recently attended a meeting in a hotel, when you returned home you found out that you left something important at the the hotel write a letter to the manager of the hotel

Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Gagan Kaur. I was at your hotel on January 14,
2024
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2024,
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 on behalf of my company Zzx.
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, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I left my cell
phone
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 inside the
room
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 locker. Yesterday I had a meeting at your place. I booked
room
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 no.456. I checked in on the same day during early morning. After
checked
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checking
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 in, I entered
into
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apply
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the
room
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 and
I
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apply
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placed my
another
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other
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 cell
phone
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 which was for international calling inside the locker. Apparently, I left the
room
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 for
meeting
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a meeting
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therefore
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, therefore
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, after
meeting
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the meeting
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 I
have
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had
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 to rush to the airport. Unfortunately, I packed my all stuff but
forget
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forgot
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 to remove the
phone
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 from the locker.
As a result
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, I
suffered
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had
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 to call my business partners.
Moreover
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,
this
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phone
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 is really crucial in my life. Being a
business man
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businessman
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, I migrated from one country to another and
this
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phone
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 has all the contact details of international
parters
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partners
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 and
include
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includes
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 international roaming
pacakges
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packages
. Eventually,
this
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phone
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 is more vital to me.
Thus
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, I would like to request you to send me
this
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phone
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 by courier. I am ready to pay
shipping
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the shipping
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 cost. It would be worthwhile if you do a favour to me. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Gagan Kaur

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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion to enhance structure. Use linking words effectively to connect sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should centralize around a single idea to maintain focus and coherence.
task achievement
A more formal tone and consistent register are recommended throughout the letter. Avoid informal language.
task achievement
Make certain to include all relevant details such as a description of the phone and any identifying features that would make it easier for the hotel staff to locate it. Also, ensure you close the letter appropriately with a suitable sign-off.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • recently attended
  • meeting
  • left behind
  • important item
  • identification
  • conference room
  • lost and found department
  • retrieve
  • Thank you in advance
  • contact details
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