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The chart and table below give information about population figures in japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph and table show the data of
Japan
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Japan's
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population
 between 1950 and
prediction
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the prediction
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on
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for
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 2055 and the table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the proportion of Japanese people in age over
than
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apply
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65s. The units were measured in millions and
percentage
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percentages
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 of
total
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the total
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population
.
Overal
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Overall
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, it can be clearly seen the
population
was
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apply
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increased gradually until 2005 and afterwards the figure will
dropped
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drop
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 significantly. Meanwhile, the proportion and percentage of senior citizens over 65 was
rise
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rising
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 and predicted will grow
significanly
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significantly
. As the graph shows, from 1950 to 2005, the number of
population
was grew
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grew
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 gradually from 84.1 to its peak point at 127.8.
Subsequently
, in 2010 and 2015, the figure began to
dropped
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drop
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at
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to
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 127.1 and 125.4, respectively.
Moreover
, the predictions of
population
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the population
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 will go down in 2035
at
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to
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 110 and
2055
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in 2055
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at
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to
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 89.9. Regarding the table of
old
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apply
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people
with
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apply
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over 65s years old, in 1950 the total
was
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accounted for 4.1
millions
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million
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 or 4.9% of
total
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the total
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population
. After 55 years, the figure
was
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rose more than six times to 25,7
millions
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million
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 and 20 of
total
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the total
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population
. In the future, the projection of
this
 age group will
rocketed
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rocket
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 to 37.2 in 2035 and 36.2 in 2055. The share of elderly people
also
 increased to 34% and 41%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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