The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts provide information about the major reasons to choose graft from their houses by the employees in hours for both adult genders in the year
of
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2019.In overview, the largest portion of the graphs
occupied
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by those who preferred to work from their homes,
this
was because they wanted to save more cash,
while
others
offer
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productivity and taking care of children.
To begin
with, the main reason is shown when more males saved
the
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salaries for their future use in their lives with a percentage of 45.
Furthermore
, females
also
accommodate about 42% of savings and use it in the long run.
Moreover
, gents
also
takes
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almost
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larger
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part in
production
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the production
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division compared to ladies with 24 per cent and 11% respectively.
This
means that in
production
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sector,
man
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are stronger than women. To add on, wives were responsible for the toddlers,
while
males
not
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good
in
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keeping sons and daughters.
Lastly
,
this
is clearly evidenced
with
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a great difference of 26%
as well as
4% respectively and
gentlemens
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gentlemen
gentlemen's
decreased at every stage constantly.
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