The maps elow show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now and plan for its development summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and to make comparisons where relevant to this data

The maps elow show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now and plan for its development summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and to make comparisons where relevant to this data
The maps given compare the current Islip town centre with the future plan
on
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its construction. From a general overview, it is obvious that there will be a solid difference and only one building which remains the same in both
of
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maps. The thing that pops up the most is how the
road
is planned to
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the infrastructure
while
the current town centre
road
ends in the school building and park. More than that, a dual carriageway will be built in the western area or in the southwest of the school building where it
becames
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becomes
became
the only thing that will not be renovated. Aside from the
road
and the school, there will be a
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complete
transformation in the city. Starting with the housing complex
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it
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will
doubled
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and
will
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be moved
in
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certain locations in order to be closer to the street.
Moreover
, there are some slight changes
for
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old infrastructures.
While
the park will be downsized,
main
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road
is planned to be demolished and replaced by a
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street
along with
the
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brand new place for shops that connect the western and eastern
road
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in the future development.
Furthermore
, there are
also
facilities
that
is
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hoping to enrich the city later on. The facilities include a bus station, shopping mall, and car park that can be used
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citizen
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there.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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