The maps elow show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now and plan for its development summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and to make comparisons where relevant to this data
The maps given compare the current Islip town centre with the future plan
on
its construction. From a general overview, it is obvious that there will be a solid difference and only one building which remains the same in both Change preposition
for
of
maps.
The thing that pops up the most is how the Change preposition
apply
road
is planned to Use synonyms
circling
the infrastructure Wrong verb form
circle
while
the current town centre Linking Words
road
ends in the school building and park. More than that, a dual carriageway will be built in the western area or in the southwest of the school building where it Use synonyms
becames
the only thing that will not be renovated.
Aside from the Correct your spelling
becomes
became
road
and the school, there will be a Use synonyms
clomplete
transformation in the city. Starting with the housing complex Correct your spelling
complete
where
Correct word choice
which
it
will Correct pronoun usage
apply
doubled
and Change the verb form
double
will
be moved Verb problem
apply
in
certain locations in order to be closer to the street. Change preposition
to
Moreover
, there are some slight changes Linking Words
for
old infrastructures. Change preposition
to
While
the park will be downsized, Linking Words
main
Change the article
the main
road
is planned to be demolished and replaced by a Use synonyms
pedestrians
street Change the noun form
pedestrian
along with
Linking Words
the
brand new place for shops that connect the western and eastern Correct article usage
a
Use synonyms
road
in the future development. Fix the agreement mistake
roads
Furthermore
, there are Linking Words
also
facilities Linking Words
that
Linking Words
is
hoping to enrich the city later on. The facilities include a bus station, shopping mall, and car park that can be used Change the verb form
are
for
Change preposition
by
citizen
there.Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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