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The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides data about the
percentage
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 of part-time
workers
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 in
England
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, Northern
Ireland
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,
Scotland
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 and
Wales
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 in 1980 and 2010
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, both in 1980 and 2010
Wales
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of part-time
workers
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. In 1980, the percentages of part-time
workers
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 in Northern
Ireland
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 and
and
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Scotland
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 were pretty similar with approximately 11 per
cent
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 and 15 per
cent
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 respectively. The rate of part-time
workers
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 in
England
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 was roughly 25 per
cent
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,
meanwhile
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 the
percentage
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 of part-time
workers
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 in
Wales
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 was more than 30 per
cent
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 which had the highest
percentage
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 of part-time
workers
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 in 1980. In 2010, Northern
Ireland
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 had the lowest
percentage
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 of part-time
workers
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 accounting for roughly 12 per
cent
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. The rate of part-time
workers
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 in
Scotland
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 was a little less than 20 per
cent
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. The percentages of part-time
workers
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 in
England
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 and
Wales
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 were pretty similar accounting for approximately 31 per
cent
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 and more or less 35 per
cent
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. In 2010
Wales
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of part-time
workers
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 compared to
England
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, Northern
Ireland
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 and
Scotland
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, workers, england, ireland, scotland, wales, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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