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The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provide information regarding the percentage of households with electrical appliances
along with
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 how many hours per week are spent doing housework activity.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in the first chart,
while
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 the percentage of washing machines rose slightly and the rate of vacuum cleaners increased gradually, there was considerable growth in the change in ownership of refrigerators. The second chart shows the
number
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 of hours of doing chores declined significantly during the period.
To begin
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 with, increasing to around 70
percent
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per cent
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 in 1960, the percentage of the changes in ownership of refrigerators experienced a slight increase to approximately 72% in 2019 after having a dip in 1980.
In addition
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, vacuum cleaners had a gradual rise from around 30% in 1920 and reached its peak to 100% in 2000 and
this
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number
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 was the same in the following 19 years.
On the other hand
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, starting from around 2%
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period,
this
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number
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 jumped to 100% in the span of 60 years, and
succeed
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succeeded
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to maintain
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in maintaining
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this
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number
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 till the end of the period. Turning to the second chart, the
number
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 of hours per week spent doing activities
such
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 as washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning, witnessed a significant decline from around 50% to 20% during four decades starting from 1920. In the following 40 years,
this
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number
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 was relatively stable, hovering at around 15%, before
finally
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 dropping to just over 10% in 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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