The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart illustrates how many people are suffering from
heart
attacks by different age
and gender groups per year.
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest number of patients
are men
while
number
of Change the article
the number
women
who are suffering from heart
problems have
been increasing dramatically when they Correct subject-verb agreement
has
getting
older.
When it comes to the Wrong verb form
get
age
category of 29- 44, it can be noticeable that 123000 of
Change preposition
apply
patients
are men
while
women
are exactly 30000. Additionally
, there are 424000 heart
attacks recorded in the age
rage
of 45-64, are Correct your spelling
range
men
.Furthermore
, women
patients
are going to rise rapidly in the age
category of 45-64, which at
rose to 136000.
Over Change preposition
apply
the
65 Correct article usage
apply
year's
old, there are 440000 Change noun form
years
of
Change preposition
apply
patients
exposed to heart
attacks, are men
while
374000 recorded as women
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words heart, age, patients, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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