several languages are in danger of extinct because they are spoken by very small number of people. some people say tgat governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe taht would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Several
languages
are dying off because
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people
are using those
languages
,
therefore
, some
people
think that
governments
need to allocate certain funds to save their
languages
. Others think that
this
would be a waste of money. I think
governments
need to concentrate on saving
languages
.
This
essay will delve into both sides, followed by my opinion.
Firstly
,
languages
are
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of every
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heritage and the fundamental of cultural identity. Unfortunately, certain
languages
are facing challenges to die off because of globalization, as social media usage and content
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absorption
that are widespread
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on
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the internet, which are all created in
english
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languages
.
Therefore
,
governments
need to realize
this
phenomenon, funding
to
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some budgets for
this
arising
issue
.
For example
, implementing projects for
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the public
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awareness
to
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the importance of the preference of mother language can be one of
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the approach
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approach
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for saving the
languages
.
Otherwise
,
this
trend would be arising
issue
, especially in poorer countries.
Consequently
, I support
this
argument, and
languages
are should be protected by
government
special policy that facing issues are need to promoted to the public
Secondly
, there are several
people
think
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that there are many social problems
such
as environmental and
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issues are more dangerous
in
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these days,
therefore
,
government
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the government
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should focus on
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. They supported their argument
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saving nature is more important than saving
languages
because without healthy surroundings, human
being
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cannot live longer. Despite certain
languages
will die in our society, there are main
languages
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globally,
such
as
english
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English
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and
chinese
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Chinese
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,
can
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be used in their country.
Therefore
,
governments
do not need to require
the
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additional budgets for saving
languages
.
This
problem can be improved by the educational system that we are running right now.
To conclude
, The usage of some
languages
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decreasing,
therefore
people
argued
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that
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whether
government
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the government
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need to spend more money to solve
this
issue
or not. There are some
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this
is not required because
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other
arising
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issues are important,
such
as environmental
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problems
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,
while
some
argued
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that mother
languages
are the main identity for every single country,
therefore
,
government
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the government
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should fund
certain
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a certain
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budget to tackle
this
issue
. I would suggest
to
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governments
should make certain
effort
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efforts
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to save their
languages
.
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