several languages are in danger of extinct because they are spoken by very small number of people. some people say tgat governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe taht would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Several
languages
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are dying off because
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people
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are using those
languages
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,
therefore
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, some
people
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think that
governments
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need to allocate certain funds to save their
languages
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. Others think that
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would be a waste of money. I think
governments
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need to concentrate on saving
languages
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.
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essay will delve into both sides, followed by my opinion.
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,
languages
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are
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of every
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heritage and the fundamental of cultural identity. Unfortunately, certain
languages
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are facing challenges to die off because of globalization, as social media usage and content
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absorption
that are widespread
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on
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the internet, which are all created in
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English
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languages
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.
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,
governments
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need to realize
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phenomenon, funding
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some budgets for
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arising
issue
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.
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, implementing projects for
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the public
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raising
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awareness
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the importance of the preference of mother language can be one of
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the approach
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approach
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approaches
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for saving the
languages
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.
Otherwise
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,
this
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trend would be arising
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, especially in poorer countries.
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, I support
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argument, and
languages
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are should be protected by
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special policy that facing issues are need to promoted to the public
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, there are several
people
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think
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who think
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that there are many social problems
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as environmental and
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issues are more dangerous
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these days,
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,
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government
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the government
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should focus on
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. They supported their argument
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saving nature is more important than saving
languages
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because without healthy surroundings, human
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beings
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cannot live longer. Despite certain
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will die in our society, there are main
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using
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globally,
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as
english
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English
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and
chinese
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Chinese
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,
can
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that can
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be used in their country.
Therefore
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,
governments
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do not need to require
the
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additional budgets for saving
languages
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.
This
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problem can be improved by the educational system that we are running right now.
To conclude
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, The usage of some
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are
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is
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decreasing,
therefore
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people
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argued
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that
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apply
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whether
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government
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the government
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need to spend more money to solve
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issue
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or not. There are some
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this
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is not required because
of
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other
arising
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issues are important,
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as environmental
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problems
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,
while
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some
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that mother
languages
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are the main identity for every single country,
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,
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government
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the government
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should fund
certain
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a certain
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budget to tackle
this
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issue
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. I would suggest
to
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that
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governments
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should make certain
effort
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efforts
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to save their
languages
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.
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