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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the sources of
police
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the police
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 budget and the charts
demonstrates
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demonstrate
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it's
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 expenses and 2018 in one
erea
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area
 of Britain. in 2017 The largest share of
police's
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the police's
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 budget was provided
from
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by
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national
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the national
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 government.
On the other hand
 officer's and staff's salaries constitutes. a large part of the costs.
Moreover
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 local taxes
,
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apply
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 and other sources have
the
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apply
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second and third places respectively in generating
incom
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income
 As can seen Salaries
the
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of the
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 charts, the largest cast after is buildings and transporting and didn't
change
 between 2017 and 2018.
Furthermore
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thechnology
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technology
 has
change
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changed
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 between 2077 and 2018 and it could gain 6
percent
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per cent
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 more than
2017
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in 2017
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. In conclusion, the sources. of money input didn't
change
incredebly
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incredibly
incredible
 and the types of money distribution
didot
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did not
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change
samificantly
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significantly
 as well.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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